Today I will be sharing my ski trip writing called The Best Day Ever!! with you in a video. Using screencastify. Watch the video down below.
I like my story because I feel that I have done a good job on my writing by using onomatopoeia. My next step would be to use more interesting vocabulary.
Kia ora Hannah.
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing this. It is good to see and hear your writing. You did a good job of reading it as your voice is nice and clear. I will help you with using more interesting vocabulary.
Kia ora Hannah.N.
ReplyDeleteThis is a good piece of writing it sounds and looks like you have put lots of effort into this. Ka pai well done keep up the fantastic work.
Your next step from me is to talk a little louder but this the best writing that I have heard from you. Keep it up ka pai.
Hey there, I'm Bailey.A from Gilberthopes school and I think this is a great peace of writing but you can try not wobbling the cam and going to a quiet place.
ReplyDeleteOk thx Bailey I will try and do that next time but we weren't allowed to go into another quiet place.
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